Great animation (Not perfectly fluid but barely noticeable), fantastic jokes, and awesome voice work. Keep up the good work! :D
You guys make your first animation, a beautiful piece by anyone's score. Then you feel the need to create this one day animation, literally spoiling any good name you made for yourself. Animations aren't just about meeting a due date or sending someone something that was made quick so people are happy. You want fans? Don't give them these types of pieces.
Obviously the fact that you did this was to incorporate a piece done to admire your work, by your music producer. Even so, the lack of effort in the pictures were disappointing.
Again, this all leads to how you want your fans to see you.
-Someone who may not produce as many videos as we would like, but provides an engaging experience in an animation that most animators dream of producing.
-The guys who did a really good animation and since they wanted to make others happy, they sent out unfinished work and overall are going to frustrate people because this is only your second video on Newgrounds.
Thanks for your time.
I'm going to give my own review in case anything was missed in the comments.
Personally I thought the animation wasn't too great. It felt fluid for the most part, but an animation is more than a bunch of pictures sliding around. So here goes nothing.
1. The animation and the quality of the images provided.
-When you watch the animation the first time you can tell that the body seems a little off on either of the characters. Either they have giant chests, or their proportions are pretty off. My first experience in this animation is the arms. Although your art style may use this form, the overall professionalism about it lacks the human figure. It seemed to me that you were trying to form the anatomy well so that you could get a sense of realism with it. (Also the arm seems to get smaller when he throws the shuriken)
-The color scheme was well done. You managed to keep the viewer (me), not focused on the background but at the same time, when I noticed it, it was a nice image of the situation. Two dark warriors fighting in a battle to the death in a forest filled with fog, trees that seemed to have decayed after years of fighting death, and yet the amount of unseen life that has hidden in the forest.
2. The Music, Sound and Voice quality
-The music was definitely one of the best parts of the animation. The way it was presented to sit the situation was well done. There could have been better music choices, but for what you chose you still did a good job.
-The sounds and different effects in the animation were okay. When you hear them originally they sound good and work well with the animation. After a bit they become distorted and underwhelming. Your sounds definitely could be presented better if you used distance to determine the overall volume of the sounds.
-The voices. Eww is all I can describe this as. Your mic is either pretty junk or the editing behind the scenes made it hard to listen to. It sounds extremely muffled and veryyy scratchy. It hurt my ears and is probably the main reason you aren't getting a high score from most viewers.
Either way I enjoyed your effort at making a fighting scene and overall you could have done better. If I were you I would take the time to follow some tutorials to practice your anatomy so the next animation looks better than ever! I would also either see about getting a new mic, not using voice, or asking some voice actors to record different pieces for you to use for your animation.
Have a good day! 7/10
Thank you for your comment! I really appreciate that! This is the first animation that I used a new method with moving the character. In the beginning it was hard to draw the inbetween, that's why I used smaller arms than normally. As you can see in the middle of the animation that they had bigger muscles than in the beginning. There is where I started to understand a little bit how to work with the inbetween keyframes. This animation was made early in 2012. I've uploaded an animation that's called 'Neth Story V - Teaser' that's my progress with Flash so far! You'll see the difference a lot!
I didn't used my voice for this animation. I used a website where people can share their work. It's a free website 'www.freesound.org'. On Neth Story V - Teaser I used my own voice with the microphone that's build in my laptop. But I even have a better microphone since I bought a Razer Megalodon 7.1. The quality is insane good!
Thanks again for your feedback and that you've enjoyed this video!
I hope I can get feedback aswell from you on my 'Neth Story V - Teaser'
<SPOILERS IF YOU HAVEN'T WATCHED IT>
I have to say, the new character was introduced extremely well and sets up for a better episode later. I do wish that this would come out faster but as any fan should know, work takes time, and you guys are doing a hell of a great job at making an awesome series. The ending, although I didn't see it coming (raccoon), was predictable. I also felt that the voice didn't really make a presence in him all that much. It was more of the control that took place rather than the voice.
As for animation, I feel the animation was fluid and effective but the stances get kinda repetitive after a while. I think if you would pull some new stances, behaviors and maybe some new techniques, your animations wouldn't be so repetitive.
Otherwise your flash is always getting better and I definitely enjoy all of them so far! :D
Yeah, I wasn't too into it. You put a lot of effort into it and you have kept it going for 39 episodes (or so I am lead to believe). But the voice acting is still poor and your art style is still sloppy. You get 3 stars for effort.
PS: The jokes were very bland and because this episode needs no backstory, you would either need really good jokes or deep jokes that would be pulled from being attached to the character.
Yeah, I understand what you're getting at. I guess I intended this episode as more of an introductory episode than anything, so humor wasn't my main focus. Once the characters have already developed, I'll try to slip in some character-driven humor.
Thanks for the review!
Recently Newgrounds has been going through a creativity burst, and I am proud to say how much respect this submission deserves has been given. Not as many people troll you because the truth and meaning you put behind this animation. Whether you are poor or rich life can be a let down but it is all about perspective. I love what you did here and I hope you continue to pursue your goals. 5/5,10/10, and favorited.
Here is my opinion
You are a GREAT graphic artist but you lack the anatomy teaching for your characters to really shine. I am not saying your animation sucked either because what I saw was beautiful, for everything but the people, the animation was fluid, enticing, and had just the right amount of detail.
Overall, keep learning your anatomy and if you re-watch it, you will probably agree when the guy sings into the mic. 9/10 and keep up the good work. :)
I agree anatomy is my weakest point, but I´m not someone who goes off and practice these sort of stuff because its boring. I guess it will come with the age eventually, until then I´ll try to make the best of it.
Thanks for the review :)
Loved it, but hated it at the same time. I think I would've have been more of the person going, "Yeah! Yeah! Just keep it up!" And I see you have potential, but that last scene when the demon gets its face sliced up, the blood just sucked. Sorry to say but getting a gash in your head like that won't just cause a few spots to trickle down your face. Definitely need to cover the whole gash first off, then make sure some bone shows for effect, unless of course demons don't have bones in your opinion.
Definitely not the best graphics but the animation is a whole different story! Some of the highlights I noticed in your work were:
1) The fact that you spun the vision around the battle while it happened. That is a rare skill now days. Last time I saw that was... hmm... I can't remember lol.
2) You used poorly recorded noises or sound clips at an extremely perfect timing. WIth such, it reduces the amount I hate those clips to near to none. Haha.
3) Music makes everything work out right and you showed this to be true.
4) Better action than most videos out there. But then again, Pokemon have to have awesome battles to seem interesting to the crowd nowadays.
Wishing you the best of luck for the rest of your animating career.
7 for an okay flash. Just like, "newgroundskeeperjim" said, you need to get an editor for your work because the grammar behind your flash is like a first grader's. Please don't take that as an insult, but rather a downside.
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