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[Haunted Shinobi]

I'm going to give my own review in case anything was missed in the comments.

Personally I thought the animation wasn't too great. It felt fluid for the most part, but an animation is more than a bunch of pictures sliding around. So here goes nothing.

1. The animation and the quality of the images provided.
-When you watch the animation the first time you can tell that the body seems a little off on either of the characters. Either they have giant chests, or their proportions are pretty off. My first experience in this animation is the arms. Although your art style may use this form, the overall professionalism about it lacks the human figure. It seemed to me that you were trying to form the anatomy well so that you could get a sense of realism with it. (Also the arm seems to get smaller when he throws the shuriken)
-The color scheme was well done. You managed to keep the viewer (me), not focused on the background but at the same time, when I noticed it, it was a nice image of the situation. Two dark warriors fighting in a battle to the death in a forest filled with fog, trees that seemed to have decayed after years of fighting death, and yet the amount of unseen life that has hidden in the forest.

2. The Music, Sound and Voice quality
-The music was definitely one of the best parts of the animation. The way it was presented to sit the situation was well done. There could have been better music choices, but for what you chose you still did a good job.
-The sounds and different effects in the animation were okay. When you hear them originally they sound good and work well with the animation. After a bit they become distorted and underwhelming. Your sounds definitely could be presented better if you used distance to determine the overall volume of the sounds.
-The voices. Eww is all I can describe this as. Your mic is either pretty junk or the editing behind the scenes made it hard to listen to. It sounds extremely muffled and veryyy scratchy. It hurt my ears and is probably the main reason you aren't getting a high score from most viewers.

Either way I enjoyed your effort at making a fighting scene and overall you could have done better. If I were you I would take the time to follow some tutorials to practice your anatomy so the next animation looks better than ever! I would also either see about getting a new mic, not using voice, or asking some voice actors to record different pieces for you to use for your animation.

Have a good day! 7/10

IwzArt responds:

Thank you for your comment! I really appreciate that! This is the first animation that I used a new method with moving the character. In the beginning it was hard to draw the inbetween, that's why I used smaller arms than normally. As you can see in the middle of the animation that they had bigger muscles than in the beginning. There is where I started to understand a little bit how to work with the inbetween keyframes. This animation was made early in 2012. I've uploaded an animation that's called 'Neth Story V - Teaser' that's my progress with Flash so far! You'll see the difference a lot!

I didn't used my voice for this animation. I used a website where people can share their work. It's a free website 'www.freesound.org'. On Neth Story V - Teaser I used my own voice with the microphone that's build in my laptop. But I even have a better microphone since I bought a Razer Megalodon 7.1. The quality is insane good!

Thanks again for your feedback and that you've enjoyed this video!

I hope I can get feedback aswell from you on my 'Neth Story V - Teaser'

[Sore Street Romance]

Here is my opinion

You are a GREAT graphic artist but you lack the anatomy teaching for your characters to really shine. I am not saying your animation sucked either because what I saw was beautiful, for everything but the people, the animation was fluid, enticing, and had just the right amount of detail.

Overall, keep learning your anatomy and if you re-watch it, you will probably agree when the guy sings into the mic. 9/10 and keep up the good work. :)

Basset-Hound responds:

I agree anatomy is my weakest point, but I´m not someone who goes off and practice these sort of stuff because its boring. I guess it will come with the age eventually, until then I´ll try to make the best of it.
Thanks for the review :)

[FullBodied Madness]

Work

Ok, heres the deal. The whole idea for the flash was good but then you decided what needs to go into the details of this which made this bad. For one, the weapons were very limited and his main weapon was a grenade. If you want him to look like he can actually fight, give him no grenades. Show that he doesn't need one shot killing area effect weapons. Also, I agree with people that the zombies (or clones if that is really what you were going for) should be green so that it gives that sickening feeling that we all are looking for. Another question, you make it almost seem if the guards are all passive until he gets within 2 feet. By that time, they are already dead. So the main things you should do are: 1)Try and spend some more time on the script (what they do). 2)Give him a variety of weapons to pick up as he goes. 3)Change the zombies (or clones) to the color green. 4)Last but not the least, add more action. Remember, they have guns not knives, so don't make them shoot close range.

All in all I give this a 6/10. Just keep going!

Kku responds:

your a good reviewer.